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Shimmers

October 12, 2006, 11:54 am

Carried by the waves in the seas,My essence flows in the ocean of memories,But I wear thin each day,As pieces of me float away,To become embedded in the sand,Or carried by the breeze onto the promised...

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October 12, 2006, 6:46 pm

Wonderful images and a very relateable piece. Very well done TS! I really like that line Jazmine picked out too.

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October 13, 2006, 4:18 am

Lee ~"I'm a mountain worn with age,A storybook, page by page,That never wants to end,It repeats itself again, and again,"Sometimes I think we feel like all is repetition. Some think that repeating...

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October 13, 2006, 9:21 am

I agree with what's been said twilight. I think the line that Maire picks out is really good. It's certainly feels like the poem describes - the older I get bits being wear thin and are being carried...

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October 13, 2006, 1:12 pm

Carried by the waves in the seas,My essence flows in the ocean of memories,A great way to open a poem, who could resist reading further.Maggie

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October 13, 2006, 1:58 pm

Lovely metaphor! I think that's the nicest description of aging I have ever read.--Must Dash

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October 13, 2006, 2:58 pm

it ain't never over! memories are the light igniting ancient eyes

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October 13, 2006, 3:06 pm

Really nice how you blended the metaphors that relate to each other and treated aging as a processthat wears you down.This one is still hanging with me as I type so I'm going back to read it again.andy

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October 13, 2006, 9:17 pm

Oh, I love the metaphor of this poem and every word in each verse.

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October 14, 2006, 2:03 am

Thanks for reading BoardFlak! Comments are much appreciated.

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October 14, 2006, 2:05 am

:) Thanks Jazmine for your kind words..Aging of the soul is something I write about alot...yet I'm still too young..

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October 14, 2006, 2:06 am

Thanks Moonchild, I like it when my readers can relate to it..:)

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October 14, 2006, 2:07 am

So true, I now can see that fact of living and moving on...it's part of the cycle of life, thanks for sharing your thoughts on this poem Maire!

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October 14, 2006, 2:08 am

Yeah, but then we are awaiting for the rebirth of ourselves in the next life..TYFR Jean

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October 14, 2006, 2:08 am

Thanks for picking out some of your favorite lines Cusick! *hug*

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October 14, 2006, 2:09 am

Thanks Madam maelstrom!

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October 14, 2006, 2:09 am

I believe that statement wintersong! TYFR!

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October 14, 2006, 2:10 am

Thanks Rure for reading and understanding the metaphors....the people on myspace don't get it yet...or can't comprehend lol

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October 14, 2006, 2:10 am

Thanks Aqua, your compliments touched me...:)

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October 14, 2006, 5:59 am

Twi, I missed this lovely one and that is not a good thing. You set such a mood here and carry it through beautifully. This has a soft flow to it and tho it has a sombre tone it is just wonderful!Jared

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